Quality: Structure
"However" is a useful linking word to connect two contrasting ideas or statements in a text. In this case it does not indicate a direct contradiction but a need to qualify the main hypothesis with consideration of other "factors".
Paragraphing is well done in this extract. Each paragraph tidily handles just one aspect, is neither too short nor too long, begins with a topic sentence (i.e. a sentence introducing the topic of the paragraph) and ends with a concluding sentence.
This journal article could have been more clearly identified.